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Artifact 2 (Bad Writing)

Ones idea of self can be approached with many definitions. The differences that come with individuality are what make a person unique in their own way. It is the mixture of individual characteristics that make a person who they are whether their distinct anatomy of self is being judged by a random person in society or by their own outlook on themselves. In Ari Le Vaux’s “A Different Education: Compost and Community, Not Literacy” , he wrote about his visit to Our School at Blair Grocery (OSBG). This school is located in the Lower Ninth Ward of New Orleans which is also labeled as “Cancer Alley” to locals. This part of New Orleans received the worst of the exposure to the chemicals that were washed upriver by Hurricane Katrina and suffered from highly contaminated soil.

OSBG is a school that produces lots of food in an area where food is extremely scarce and sells its goods in order to keep the school running. From what I had read in the article, I feel as if no matter what type of person you were in the past, OSBG did not hesitate to welcome you into their community so that you could work together for a good cause. The school is in a area known for violence and even includes former gang members that want to do good for themselves and the area that they live in. In the article Le Vaux quotes the schools founder, Nat Turner, when he says “If a student wants to learn to read we’ll help them learn. If a student wants to take the GED we’ll help him prepare.” This falls back on the fact that everyones unique form of self is what makes that person beautiful. The diversity in students at OSBG brings differences in lifestyles and this keeps the community such tight knit group. The change that was seen by Le Vaux in the students who entered the school seemed absolutely amazing and it is such a good place for people to make a change in a life that may have been caught in a hole that seemed unescapable.

Le Vaux’s writing definitely gave me a very clear picture of how different this school was compared to the standard classroom education. In the article he explains how a student doing independent study research led a discussion on environmental racism by comparing worldly affairs to the position that they are in themselves. In my honest opinion, I think that discussions like this can be so useful to the minds of any person on this planet and actions such as these should be seen in EVERY school in EVERY part of the world. Students that speak their minds and take notice to issues that actually matter rather than all of the filth that is glorified to the world nowadays will help them students grow so much more as positive members of society and possibly sculpt a more mature version of self that can be used as a the tool to keep moving them forward in a life of success.

I can easily say that I completely agree with Le Vaux’s indirect writing on the mindset of the people that make up OSBG. His writing pushes me toward the assumption that the importance of self plays a big part in keeping the community as strong as it is. By reading the ways of learning that are used by the individuals involved in the school, it makes me extremely happy to see that there are actually people in this world that have the passion for living such a positive lifestyle. When I read this article, it honestly reminded me a lot of my family and friends because they mean the world to me. The bonds that Le Vaux mentioned made me think of how much stronger my family has gotten in the past couple of years and how much I have grown as a person. When I heard of how the residents of the Lower Ninth Ward came back with their heads up after the damage that Hurricane Katrina had done, I thought back to how hard the problems hit my family when my dad left to Puerto Rico without warning. He left us with unbelievable debt and took most of our money. He left my mom to support four boys by herself. After all of this had happened, we kept our heads high and worked together to do whatever we could to keep our house. Around this time last year, I had been working three jobs and attended school at Northeastern Illinois University for my freshman year. No matter what I wanted to succeed and not let something like this stop me from moving forward. It was one of the most drastic growing experiences I have ever encountered and it made me a lot more appreciative of life and what really matters. When I think of my own definition of self, I would probably say that it is what should be most important in a persons life. It is what makes you, YOU and you should never let anybody change that. Everybody has unique elements that make up their own form of self. What people do not realize is that it is those different elements that make a person beautiful. I can say from my own personal experience that if you are comfortable with the person that you truly are inside, you will live a happy life no matter what. You do you.


Artifact 1 (Better Writing)

To start off, my research topic was rap music and music making. Nowadays, the rap game is absolutely amazing and I love it. I feel as if rap is evolving constantly and the new school is sort of intertwining with the old fashioned sense of style. It’s so interesting because no music is ever the same and new trends just keep on being created with all different sounds, paces, rhythms, etc. My major argument for my final project will basically be how rap music is seen in many different lights. Nowadays, society is always looking for the negative attributes first before looking for any sign of good whatsoever and that is a big problem. Music plays a very important in my life and I take it very seriously. When I hear about all of the negative things that are said about rapping and how it is “killing” our youth, I get so mad because these opinions are mainly coming from the individuals who have minimal knowledge of rap music. Although I disagree with this outlook, these are the views that people are going to listen to because this is what is fed to them every day. One person can say that rap is all about violence and that it’s killing our world and sure enough, others will believe them and instantly begin to hate this wonderful form of art. In reality, rapping is a way of expressing what you cannot say in the average tongue and it is people like rappers who ACTUALLY change the world. No matter what people believe, music is what connects this planet. Music is everywhere and always will be, just like rap. It is nonstop evolution at its finest.


Reflection: A Race To A Successful Finish

Although I feel like this semester went by ridiculously fast, I can easily look back and see that I gained a lot more knowledge about how to write correctly than I thought I would. Coming into English 104, I was very confident with my writing because I had always gotten good grades on my essays throughout high school and my first year of college, including on my ACT test. When I saw the syllabus and saw that we were working with a blog website, I instantly thought of the short blogs that I was required to do last year at Northeastern Illinois and I was sure that it would be a breeze because they were very short. I was wrong, but not at all disappointed. I love to write and writing has basically been my thing since I was younger so I couldn’t wait to see what we were actually going to be writing about.

I remember the first couple days of the semester when we did our very first encounter. We had to write about where we see ourselves in the year 2021.  I was interested in a heartbeat because I love writing about the future, so I wrote “I walk out of my back door on the beach of Southern California. I am a very hard working and passionate educator that loves to help children who cannot always help themselves.” along with me having a beautiful wife and other luxuries. I could write about it for days. My personal mentality has everything to do with what I am going to be doing next. I am the type of person that is always looking to make moves and excel every day of my life if I get the chance. That includes learning more and taking constructive criticism on my so called “perfect” writing. After my first couple encounters and short essays, I realized that my past good grades were definitely not transitioning as smoothly as the move here. I would post my papers on gateways and I would receive all super nice and general comments from my classmates because in reality, nobody is going to say anything too critical. What’s different about me is that it is critique that made me as mature as I am today and although I may not like it sometimes, I always pull through. The only person who would actually criticize my writing was Kimberly Volmer, which was my instructor.

By reading the comments and markings on my graded papers, I began to realize what my English teacher actually wanted me to do. The one comment that seriously stuck in my head when I read it was the comment that was made in light of my uncertainty in my writing sometimes. It said “Write like your 100% right. Be YOURSELF!” That’s when I finally just let loose and wrote my next paper exactly how I would if I were talking to one of my friends about something that I felt strongly about and I have to say that it was so much easier to go about. After a week of complete anxiety, I got my short essay back and on it, was a “B+”.  I was so relieved that I had done as well as I did. I started to notice that my writing had gotten a lot smoother with its wording and it seemed more, well, real. Even the comments on gateways were getting more detailed showing that that feeling of connection between writer and reader was finally there. One example of my writing that I am actually proud of is my third encounter about creative blogging when I say, “The audience is looking for some “UMPH”, not just a Microsoft Word document. The color scheme and the imagination put into something like this can sometimes be as important as the writing itself because if you lack creativity in your work, your actual writing might not even be looked at by a passer-by. The design of your site also plays a big part of ethos in rhetorical writing. In my eyes, the design could be a “self venting” exercise that reflects the kind of person that you are. Depending on the creativity shown, your personality might come out more than you thought it would and the audience will most likely enjoy reading your blog a lot more.” The biggest difference I saw was the tone in my papers. I had this sort of overconfidence in my writing that wasn’t yet cockiness and I absolutely loved it. I felt like my opinion was put out so much stronger than it ever was before and it felt amazing. I wasn’t afraid to state my complete opinion.

Seeing all of this difference in my writing was such a good thing for me and I’m so glad that I finally “came out of my shell” when it came to my writing. I realized this when I would look at my older essays and see that they were pretty bland and tasteless. To be honest, whenever I would write papers in high school, I would use as many intelligent words as I could think of when I would explain myself and it would make my writing really confusing. A perfect example of my “father tongue” is the very first sentences of my first article that I had written when I write “Ones idea of self can be approached with many definitions. The differences that come with individuality are what make a person unique in their own way. It is the mixture of individual characteristics that make a person who they are whether their distinct anatomy of self is being judged by a random person in society or by their own outlook on themselves.” Let’s just say I wrote like I was trying to write for the president. It’s pretty bad. This basically gave me a reality check with my writing because after seeing all of the progress, it gave me a reason why my peers were so general with me when commenting on gateways. The feedback was general because my writing was general and I can easily give credit to my entire class for playing a big part in the transformation of my writing skills.

Although my writing has gotten so much better, I still have some flaws in my new and improved style. The problems that I find in my writing are mainly minor mistakes such as using run on sentences and kind of “beating around the bush” in a sense. I always catch myself babbling on and on about a point that I am trying to make when in reality, I just need to say what I want to say. I finally came to the conclusion that talking about what you want to say is much harder than just saying it, so now, that is exactly what I do.  I am still working on my excessive use of “big words” in my writing and I have to say that it is at an all time low. I still tend to zone in sometimes and write like a president but most of the time I catch myself before it gets too out of hand. In my opinion, there is not much more to change about my writing and I can’t wait for my writing to be as good as it can possibly be.

Since my change in writing, I have noticed that both the assertiveness and confidence in my papers are now the two stronger factors in my writing for a change. I find it so weird how the areas that I struggled in with my past writing are now my stronger points. For some reason I feel as if my writing actually makes a connection with the readers now. No more general tones or super fancy words because now I recognize how superior my writing can be without trying to sound smarter than I really am. Being myself is really all I need. Taking that person who I truly am inside and putting it into my writing was probably the best decision I could have made because not only has my writing progressed, but it is so much easier for me to write papers now due to the fact that I see it as me just talking. That’s it. Whatever I feel like saying, I can say, and nobody can tell me that I’m wrong. What I feel is what I write and that is what makes me love writing so much more nowadays. Thank you English 104. I couldn’t have done it without you.


Rap in Society

To start off, my research topic was rap music and music making. Nowadays, the rap game is absolutely amazing and I love it. I feel as if rap is evolving constantly and the new school is sort of intertwining with the old fashioned sense of style. It’s so interesting because no music is ever the same and new trends just keep on being created with all different sounds, paces, rhythms, etc. My major argument for my final project will basically be how rap music is seen in many different lights. Nowadays, society is always looking for the negative attributes first before looking for any sign of good whatsoever and that is a big problem. Music plays a very important in my life and I take it very seriously. When I hear about all of the negative things that are said about rapping and how it is “killing” our youth, I get so mad because these opinions are mainly coming from the individuals who have minimal knowledge of rap music. Although I disagree with this outlook, these are the views that people are going to listen to because this is what is fed to them every day. One person can say that rap is all about violence and that it’s killing our world and sure enough, others will believe them and instantly begin to hate this wonderful form of art. In reality, rapping is a way of expressing what you cannot say in the average tongue and it is people like rappers who ACTUALLY change the world. No matter what people believe, music is what connects this planet. Music is everywhere and always will be, just like rap. It is nonstop evolution at its finest.


Real. Be it.

Since I’ve been home sick, I have been doing so much thinking that it’s overwhelming. I have so much time to myself that it’s hard to keep from taking that time to reflect on yourself and who you really are. Since sophomore year of high school, I have had to grow up faster than anyone I know. At the end of sophomore year, my dad had left my family after taking all of our money and leaving my three brothers, my mom, and I with over four hundred thousand dollars in debt. What hurt the most was that my father was my best friend when I was much younger and I loved being around him all the time. Just as the seasons do, everybody changes sometime, whether it is for good or bad. Around this time last year, I was working three jobs while attending school at Northeastern Illinois University. I was working ridiculous hours to the point where I was pulling all-nighters at least twice a week so that I could finish my homework for school. I would have to work from 3 pm until 3 am every Friday, Saturday, and Sunday at a banquet hall so that I could help my mom pay the mortgage and buy food for me and my brothers. The situation that my family was put in was one that nobody in this world deserves. It became so rough at one point that I made a decision that put my entire future in jeopardy. Because my family was struggling so much, I began hanging out with a very dangerous crowd in order to make more money than I was already making from my jobs. To make a long story short, I found myself stuck in situations that I knew had to get myself away from.

Once that part in my life was over, I began shaping my life to how I wanted. I promised myself that I would go to school, get good grades, and make something of myself. Ever since that day ended, I have had this mentality that I know is going to keep me moving forward in my life no matter what. After making up my mind and realizing my true goals in life, I finally had found myself. I found that I have so much more to offer to the world than working for minimum wage and getting into trouble all the time. I want to make people feel good about both themselves and the world around them because in my eyes, this life is beautiful. This world is full of real people and those are the people in your life that are going to rub off on you in a positive way. As of right now, I am attending my second year of college in hopes of becoming a special educator. I have a very tight knit group of friends who I love and care for with my life and I know that somewhere in the future, there’s something waiting for me. I love everything about my place in this world at the moment and there’s only one thing that I know I have to do in order for me to fulfill my dream of the future. Keep it real.


Only Jettin Forward: Pt. 2

 

Im just walkin out my back door

Southern California.

2021, and my school aint too far from ya

Make a clap, give me hands, man i gotta be impressed

Hard Working, makin’ money, im just livin’ like the best

He’s a Special Educator…….

Wifeys on Grade A, her

Man just got his pa-per

To schools he is a Savior

Make music with his homeboys

Eyes wide like Home-Alone Boy

Buy a ticket, Kick Back

Relax and watch the show boy

 

Instrumental: Twanbeatmaker- 1st Place Banger (Google)


You Do You.

Ones idea of self can be approached with many definitions. The differences that come with individuality are what make a person unique in their own way. It is the mixture of individual characteristics that make a person who they are whether their distinct anatomy of self is being judged by a random person in society or by their own outlook on themselves. In Ari LeVaux’s “A Different Education: Compost and Community, Not Literacy” , he wrote about his visit to Our School at Blair Grocery (OSBG). This school is located in the Lower Ninth Ward of New Orleans which is also labeled as “Cancer Alley” to locals. This part of New Orleans received the worst of the exposure to the chemicals that were washed upriver by Hurricane Katrina and suffered from highly contaminated soil.

OSBG is a school that produces lots of food in an area where food is extremely scarce and sells its goods in order to keep the school running. From what I had read in the article, I feel as if no matter what type of person you were in the past, OSBG did not hesitate to welcome you into their community so that you could work together for a good cause. The school is in a area known for violence and even includes former gang members that want to do good for themselves and the area that they live in. In the article LeVaux quotes the schools founder, Nat Turner, when he says “If a student wants to learn to read we’ll help them learn. If a student wants to take the GED we’ll help him prepare.” This falls back on the fact that everyones unique form of self is what makes that person beautiful. The diversity in students at OSBG brings differences in lifestyles and this keeps the community such tight knit group. The change that was seen by LeVaux in the students who entered the school seemed absolutely amazing and it is such a good place for people to make a change in a life that may have been caught in a hole that seemed unescapable.

LeVaux’s writing definitely gave me a very clear picture of how different this school was compared to the standard classroom education. In the article he explains how a student doing independent study research led a discussion on environmental racism by comparing worldly affairs to the position that they are in themselves. In my honest opinion, I think that discussions like this can be so useful to the minds of any person on this planet and actions such as these should be seen in EVERY school in EVERY part of the world. Students that speak their minds and take notice to issues that actually matter rather than all of the filth that is glorified to the world nowadays will help them students grow so much more as positive members of society and possibly sculpt a more mature version of self that can be used as a the tool to keep moving them forward in a life of success.

I can easily say that I completely agree with LeVaux’s indirect writing on the mindset of the people that make up OSBG. His writing pushes me toward the assumption that the importance of self plays a big part in keeping the community as strong as it is. By reading the ways of learning that are used by the individuals involved in the school, it makes me extremely happy to see that there are actually people in this world that have the passion for living such a positive lifestyle. When I read this article, it honestly reminded me a lot of my family and friends because they mean the world to me. The bonds that LeVaux mentioned made me think of how much stronger my family has gotten in the past couple of years and how much I have grown as a person. When I heard of how the residents of the Lower Ninth Ward came back with their heads up after the damage that Hurricane Katrina had done, I thought back to how hard the problems hit my family when my dad left to Puerto Rico without warning. He left us with unbelievable debt and took most of our money. He left my mom to support four boys by herself. After all of this had happened, we kept our heads high and worked together to do whatever we could to keep our house. Around this time last year, I had been working three jobs and attended school at Northeastern Illinois University for my freshman year. No matter what I wanted to succeed and not let something like this stop me from moving forward. It was one of the most drastic growing experiences I have ever encountered and it made me a lot more appreciative of life and what really matters. When I think of my own definition of self, I would probably say that it is what should be most important in a persons life. It is what makes you, YOU and you should never let anybody change that. Everybody has unique elements that make up their own form of self. What people do not realize is that it is those different elements that make a person beautiful. I can say from my own personal experience that if you are comfortable with the person that you truly are inside, you will live a happy life no matter what.

 

Works Cited

Le Vaux, Ari. “A Different Education: Compost And Community, Not Literacy.” the Atlantic.Web.


Blog Bonanza!

The blogs that I studied were the blogs that we looked at in the “Tracks in the Sand” area on wordpress. Almost every one of the blog sites that I saw displayed a ridiculous amount of visual enhancers that caught my attention. They were so full of color that it was almost impossible not to look at the others that were made. I remember seeing one that had a menu that looked similar to a computer chip. It was one of the coolest layouts I have ever seen!

I really like the work that was put into these blog sites because everybody knows that a boring site is not going to catch any attention or popularity. The audience is looking for some “UMPH”, not just a Microsoft Word document. The color scheme and the imagination put into something like this can sometimes be as important as the writing itself because if you lack creativity in your work, your actual writing might not even be looked at by a passer-by. The design of your site also plays a big part of ethos in rhetorical writing. In my eyes, the design could be a “self venting” exercise that reflects the kind of person that you are. Depending on the creativity shown, your personality might come out more than you thought it would and the audience will most likely enjoy reading your blog alot more.

The way I came to these conclusions on my view of blog design elements was by actually creating artwork myself. I personally make music and by doing this for so long, I have discovered that almost every piece of work that is made has a meaning behind it. There is always a piece of you that will come out when expressing yourself through things like music, drawing, painting, or whatever you prefer. I can actually use myself as proof of this phenomena and highly recommend that everyone should learn the best way possible to express themselves because it WILL change your life.


Facebook Foolin’

The website that I chose to use was Facebook. We all know what Facebook is but for those who do not, Facebook is a social network where people can communicate all over the world by commenting, messaging, and even leaving videos. What some do not realize is that this “place to mingle” can turn into an absolute battleground. The conversation that I came across on Facebook that gives a perfect example of this “battleground” started with a girl writing on a guys wall implying that one of the girls that he knows was a “dumbass bitch” and it started a huge Facebook fight. After hearing this, the opposing girl joined the conversation by calling the original girl “pathetic” and it started an even more violent conversation.

This fight only went between the two girls and the guy never replied throughout the entire issue. By looking at the comments that were made on the post to the guys wall, it is very obvious that there is a lot of hate behind all of the words that are used. What I find very funny is that these situations are nothing new to Facebook at all. From my own personal experience, I see things like this happen every single time I check my Facebook and the ridiculousness never seems to get old. The site was created for people to mingle with one another but it seems to have created a place of war that is accessible almost anywhere. No matter where you go you can hear who and what people are saying about you. It makes it even worse because you do not even need to be registered on the site to message somebody so anything can be said by anyone.

Although you can message people, you cannot see other peoples pages unless you are their friend so there is some sort of confidentiality.  In order to register for one of these accounts and start “mingling” you have to give your full name and email but in my opinion, this is very dangerous to the person registering. I feel that you should not have to give your e-mail because it is so easy to hack into websites its crazy. In all honesty, I feel that there is no way that “effective commenting” can be carried out. The only way that that can be possible is if a site would penalize the person commenting in an unacceptable way but this would definitely hurt ratings and popularity so I don’t think Facebook would be willing to do that any time soon. Until the time comes, everyone have fun with these new ways of communicating and let the battles begin!


Jettin’.

I walk out of my back door on the beach of Southern California. It’s officially the year 2021 and I’m working at an elementary school not too far from my home. I feel like I have finally impressed myself with the position that I have always wanted to be in since I was younger. I am a very hard working and passionate educator that loves to help children who cannot always help themselves. I have a beautiful wife that is also my best friend who supports me no matter how ridiculous the circumstance may be. I am sitting on a Masters in Education and working on a degree to be a counselor for troubled children at low income schools. My alternative passion also clashes with my side work which is producing music in my studio with some of my closest friends that I am lucky enough to still have in my life. My final goal in this journey is always going to stick with me as long as I live, and that is to be a hero to someone whether it be my future family or my students, preferebly both. 


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